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However, despite the clear technical mastery, to me, the page comes across as flat and uninteresting. It's a perfect example of why Manga dominate American comics. For all this page's technical accuracy and skill, it focuses too much on detail instead of conveying raw emotion.
I would like to recommend Kenichi Sonoda's "Gunsmith Cats" to you. In particular, the 9-part Manga called "Bean Bandit" has some spectacular pages of car chases.
Were you to compare the those works with what's presented here, it becomes obvious that the strengths of this page are also its weakneses.
The backgrounds - while beautifully rendered - are distracting from the principle action of the scene. They are - for the most part - static, and only take energy out of the page.
The cars - which are exquisitely detailed - have no motion-lines whatsoever and almost appear to be standing still, again taking action out of the scene. What's more is that we don't see the drivers. Adding a human face to an event is a great way to input emotion.
The insert panels - while informative - ultimately detract from the action, and are unnecessary.
Speedometer Panel: We know they're going fast, and unless the speed is relevant to another plot point - like a bomb or something - it adds no new information.
Mirror Panel: While beautifully done, it's really static. The background is just sitting there instead of rushing by. Nor does the glance suggest that the driver is deeply focused on what they're doing.
The bottom three panels - while conveying clearly the use of a nitrous oxide booster - are really static.
Canister Panel: Its just lazily sitting there. And while the action lines pass by it, they don't add any urgency or sense-of-importance to the shot.
Button Pressing Panel: The hand appears to be leisurely hitting the button (instead of furiously mashing it down). And if the intent is to show how relaxed the driver is, then this shot still needs to be redone to reinforce that.
Tire Panel: This could do with a LOT more action lines. There's not enough going on - visually - to suggest a huge boost in speed.
In conclusion, I have to say - once again - that your skills are fantastic. But I think the layouts and panels could be taken to the next level.
Cheers,
~JOE
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